Yes, especially the octave up really exposed the inconsistencies in the dynamics of my playing. Certain notes really stand out.
I experimented with actually playing the melody an octave lower and half speed, then removing the highest line and lowering the octave lower to get two octaves lower and four times as slow as the original…but that sounded bad (in context).
It would definitely be worth being more conscious of what will happen to the original loops. Like if I knew one of the loops was going to be raised an octave, playing it with a more mellow tone on the guitar, or maybe a little softer.
I love the 16th note offsets in your piece. It’s so cool to hear the little melodies emerge in your mind from within the originals. It reminds me I have to get back into trying to learn to play Steve Reich’s Violin Phase! It’s a big challenge.